First edit evaluation

The first edit of our documentary went really well, we could see that it was coming together and we could finally see a narrative. So after receiving feedback from our class mates and teachers, we came up with things to change on our documentary:
VOICEOVER- THIRD PERSON- (VOLUME HOW IT FITS IN TO THE DOC)
FADE OUTS- FADING INTO BLACK- SOME FADES LAST FOR TOO LONG
SHARPER CUTS- CUT AT THE BEGINNING FOR SMOOTHER CONTEXT
ENDING- END ON HOW ALI RELATES TO THE SUBJECT OF ADDICTION AND TECH. END ON HIS JOURNEY TO FIND OUT
CHANGE OF DOC MODE: OBSERVATORY- PARTICIPATORY
We then showed this edit to our teacher, who gave us a few criticisms that we could use in order to change a few things when we edit some more. He thought that the fades outs made the doc. look a little boring, because they went on for longer than expected. However, when it came down to editing it we found that it was difficult not to have such long pauses because without them, they doc. became too rushed and didnt flow as smoothly.
After dicussing the cuts and fades of our documentary, our teacher also made it clear that the sound wasnt very good at times, for example the short interviews we shot at Liverpool Street, had a lot of background noise, that we quite distracting. This is a problem that we already knew about, but we did find it rather difficult to block out the background noise and not disturb what the people we saying. After this, we dicussed the idea of changing the mode of our doc; from observatory to participatory, which then changed the voiceover script, from third person to first, in order for it to make sense to our audience.